Being effective over a decade the Gun Control Act of 1968 fail to show its result when the number of arm robbery cases came to limelight which secretly alarmed the armed forces??? to rise from their eternal sleep???, because the direct intuition came as the arms been leaking from the legal licensed arm keepers. The "idea" is here, but the thesis must be a single declarative "position" statement.

The underlined are grammatical word/phrase choice errors - and yes, it's just a draft.